• Please indicate where and how your peer’s thesis statement could be improved. 

You can see what the writer was trying to say but his stance wasn’t clear enough.He has an argument but its not specific enough

• Please indicate where your partner’s evidence needs more ANALYSIS.

For the most part, the evidence in this paper was given a strong analysis. But in body paragraph 2, the explanation for the piece of evidence used was kind of repetitive so the wrote an shorten the analysis be continued to be thorough and clear nonetheless 

• Please indicate where your partner needs more evidence from the text to support a claim.

He needs at least 1 more evidence in the 2nd to last paragraph instead of it being a paragraph just talking about something and explaining it.

• Please indicate where your peer’s paper needs a TOPIC SENTENCE that explains what their paragraph(s) will be about.

This person has done a good job with his topic sentences and has one of each paragraph, giving the reader an understanding of what each paragraph is about.

• Please check your partner’s citations

This person only cited evidence in the first paragraph and hasn’t cited in the rest of the essay. They need to do so to inform the reader what part of the book the evidence is from

• Comment on the STRUCTURE of your partner’s paper.  Are the points/claims they are making presented in the right order? Why or why not?  What about the structure of the paper might need to change?

The structure of this paper is solid and the points that are made are in the right order. The only thing i would say for the writer to change is that , if there is a connection between two different parts of the essay, the writer should talk about the connection. Also, I feel as though there should be more evidence in each body to strengthen the writer’s argument